I've received several guesses as to the identity of the missing major element in the story I posted a couple days ago. Some good guesses, yes. The element I failed to include? No.
To me, a major element must be identified as a nurturer of the suspension of disbelief, a key detail or suggestion that would be obviously necessary to complete the visual.
I'll keep this brief because I'm working on a lengthy post of more important and more palatable content.
The answer: flies. No carnage such as Gregory experienced would hold a candle to reality without the inclusion of flies. Blow flies, green shit flies, even a smattering of hungry horse flies. In and out of the meaty depths they roam, planting eggs within the mushy rot, nest to a million maggots left to shake the bloated caverns as they frenzy their feast amongst the livers and colons, hurried along by their hunger, made dizzy by the gasses of the putrid. Flies, of course!
To me, a major element must be identified as a nurturer of the suspension of disbelief, a key detail or suggestion that would be obviously necessary to complete the visual.
I'll keep this brief because I'm working on a lengthy post of more important and more palatable content.
The answer: flies. No carnage such as Gregory experienced would hold a candle to reality without the inclusion of flies. Blow flies, green shit flies, even a smattering of hungry horse flies. In and out of the meaty depths they roam, planting eggs within the mushy rot, nest to a million maggots left to shake the bloated caverns as they frenzy their feast amongst the livers and colons, hurried along by their hunger, made dizzy by the gasses of the putrid. Flies, of course!
Then the flies bite him and he becomes a Vampire? Because otherwise, you are going to be short a protagonist.
ReplyDeleteMaybe Gregory's wound is self inflicted. Maybe Gregory is the protagonist. Maybe Gregory has left his body and found his being shifted to a fly. Maybe Gregory was bitten by a mad cow. Maybe the whole clan was chased into a shoreline cave by a great white, Gregory the only survivor, the tide having left them run aground inside the cavern.
ReplyDeleteGregory is becoming exponentially more interesting. Maybe when he becomes a fly, he becomes a Vampire fly who bites the cow, making it mad. (I always get mad when bitten by flies.) Gregory may have been the beginning of Mad Cow disease. You could always keep the cavern bit, though. I like the cavern bit. Subplot maybe?
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